Showing posts with label character. Show all posts
Showing posts with label character. Show all posts

Saturday, 20 December 2014

Some Sentimental Rambling




This post? Basically some long-winded rambling about the end of my 4-year-running Wattpad series.

(Four years. Seriously? It should be five, no? I’m 18 now, I remember being 13 then. I think I’m just gonna say five)
Okay, do-over.

This post? Basically some long-winded rambling about the end of my 5-year-running Wattpad series.

Alright, now we’re ready.


Tuesday, 5 February 2013

'The New Maid' character pictures

Due to PhotoBucket's ridiculous beta update whatever, slideshows are currently down. So all my character pictures are being put up here, instead. I know, I know, my last post was pretty much the character pictures, but this is official. And, y'know, I have to put pictures of the girls as well.
So, without further ado:

Naomi Scott, as Sara



Taylor Spreitler as Jess



Park Tae-Jun, as Jae


Kim Bum as Seung-Hyun



Ho Jun-Yeon as Min-Ki



Kim Ki-Bum as Kwin



Park Jae-Hyun as Alex





Grant Gustin as Jake



Well, those are the characters. I'd love any suggestions for a cover-- feel free to leave a comment . Hope you enjoy the story :)

Tuesday, 29 January 2013

I'm back! (News and yummy pics)

Yes, all, my exams are over! This means freedom!

For a while, at least.

Anyway, this means I am writing once more. Two stories, actually.

First is That Super Hot Pervert is Mine. Needless to say, it won. By a landslide. A little disappointed, but simultaneously happy. If you haven't read it (oh, who am I kidding, everyone's read it), check out the first chapter preview.

Next is a new story that just hit me while I was studying for my exams. This story is inspired greatly from my growing love of Korean entertainment. I've got a little description up, though the story is going to be much more awesome as I freaking suck at descriptions:

What do you do when it's your job to live with the hottest new boy band? The guys of Mercury are weird, wild, and uncontrollable, and Sara's been hired to try and keep their dorm in check. But how can she, when these five gorgeous guys all seem intent on winning her over?

Terrible description, I know, but I couldn't do better! So, just to make everything better, I'll be putting up pics of the Mercury guys ;)


Park Tae-jun


Kim Bum

Ho Jun-yeon

Kim Ki-bum

Park Jae-hyun

There's a chick somewhere in the story too, but who cares about her?

So, hope you enjoyed this comeback post, and are anticipating my stories! Love y'all, thanks for all the pageviews guys!
And now off to work my ass off doing way too many things all at once.

Sunday, 25 November 2012

Stuck with Him: Oh, What a Ride it was



If you’re here, chances are you’ve just come from finishing Stuck with Him. First things first: I love you. I love everyone– not only those who actually cared enough to come and read my rambling, but anybody who voted, commented, or even read the story. All my fans, all my readers– you guys are my Wattpad soul. I would never have finished this story if it weren’t for you all. I thank everyone.

The title pretty sums up my whole Stuck with Him experience. When I started the story, I felt nothing about it but an attraction to that smexy guy’s picture I’d found while looking for pictures for Keith, Anne’s older brother from Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room (okay, that was a long title. Not writing that huge name again). I didn’t really find one that fit him perfectly, but the picture I did get was awesome and I thought it would be a shame if he didn’t get his own story.

Thus started Stuck with Him, or as it was first known, I have to share a room with this hot, stuck-up jerk? FML (don’t judge me. We couldn’t write story descriptions back then, okay? You basically had to fit the description in the title). I decided that instead of writing a guy who fit my own fantasies, I’d write one who didn’t. I also went for a complete opposite of the cute, girly Anne, in the strong, feisty Claire.

I have to say, I was completely stunned with the reception it got. When I posted the first chapter, Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room was sitting at #3 on What’s Hot, so I did expect a good reading for I have to share a room with this hot, stuck-up jerk? FML’s first chapter. But I most definitely didn’t expect #1 after the first chapter. I was ecstatic, I really was. I was just glad people liked it, and not only Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room, as it meant they might like my writing in itself.

Well, a lot of stuff happened during Stuck with Him’s life. The main one would have to be my one year hiatus. When I stopped writing then, I really thought I wouldn’t write for Wattpad ever again. It just seemed like a huge task on my weekly to-do list, and it didn’t really… satisfy me. I think what really stopped me was the starting of my own novel. I got so wrapped up in it, I couldn’t bear to write anything else.

But I am a lazy git. It’s been one and a half years, and I have written four pages. Yay me. Well, I did write more than one hundred pages in total (and about another hundred in a very rough draft that reads like an eleven-year-old’s work). I just deleted it all when I realized it was all shit. Well, not deleted– it’s still there. I like to read it and think about how far I’ve come. It feeds my ego.

Whoa, I sidetracked so easily there. Right. Back to Stuck with Him. So I went on hiatus. I just went on my mail once in a while to clean out the inbox (because the thought of anything being completely full freaks me out. I hate it). I saw all these messages and comments, people telling me they loved my stories, and asking if I would write again. And I did feel bad, but I ignored it. Damn, I was a bitch.

And then I finally got one asking me if I was dead. That was pretty much the last stroke. I had to come back. I started on Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room as that one had progressed further, and seemed more popular (damn, now that I write this down, I sound terrible. I am terrible). So, I finally finished it, and it was awesome. I loved writing it at the end– it was so my style, all dark and action, with an insane, obsessive character to boot. Word of caution: I love bordering-on-insane characters. They are a joy to write and read about.

Anyway, after I’d finished Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room (so much for not writing that long name again.), I thought about quitting again, but then decided against it and started up Stuck with Him again. And I haven’t regretted it.

Mainly because in that one year hiatus I had changed so much. Before, I preferred writing Anne and Travis’s story, because I related with Anne so much more. At fourteen, I was cute and girly, shy and usually spacing out. I wanted a Travis, a guy who was hot and pervy, and could open up new things for me (no. I do not mean that in a perverted way. Get your head out of the gutter, and I’ll do the same). After the hiatus, however, I was pretty much Claire. I’m much tougher now, much bitchier, more fiery. My tastes have changed too. I always wanted a fun guy, one who’d laugh along to anything. Now, recognizing myself as someone who can be very mean, I want a guy who’ll fight back during an argument. Not someone who’ll just lie down and take it, because that would make me feel shitty afterwards. I want… an Ashley.

So now, before I bore you any further, I really have to thank some very special Wattpaders. So, here goes:

Abrocks
Who remembers Abrocks? Only me? She disappeared a little before I went on hiatus. I felt such a connection to her, as she was a McFly fan too. Her story Sharing a room with four hot, but totally different guys was super popular, so I’d expect at least some seasoned Wattpaders to remember her. Anyway, I loved her, and she inspired me to put McFly in my story too.

Girl, I love you, and love all the comments you’ve ever written. They’re always so detailed, and leave some real opinion and thought, which I love. Your comment on chapter 36 of Stuck with Him really impacted me. Thank you.

Abby! I love this chick, not only for her writing, but just her as well. She’s a really cool person. She’s a sports fan, like me, and just about the only cricket fan I’ve ever met over the internet. If you don’t know her (and you should), go check out her page.


Well, I hope I haven’t bored you all too much! Now, if you’re sticking with me for my writing and not my rambling, then you should definitely check out preview chapters for two new stories. Remember to vote for the one you want me to write first by commenting on this post, or the chapter post.


They are:

The sequel to Hiding a super hot, pervert guy on the run in my room, following Anne and Travis after what happened at the warehouse: That Super Hot Pervert is Mine.

And, a new story with a new girl and Ashley’s friends, Leo, Ryan and Seth, and a very hot teacher: Game, Set, Match. (Am still uncertain about this title. Suggestions welcome)


Thanks for reading, and hope you enjoy the preview chapters! Whatever happens, one thing's for sure. After this story, to me, Ashley will always be a guy's name.

Game, Set, Match: Chapter 1

New story! Brand new story, this one involving Leo, Ryan and Seth, characters I absolutely love and excel at writing about. No description for this one yet, but I can tell you this: it involves a very hot teacher.
If you want me to start writing this story from February, remember to vote by leaving a comment!




Chapter 1



I hovered on the spot, sneaking glances over every once in a while. Come on, I willed myself. Just go over there. I was never this shy. Not in high school, anyway. Why should it change for college?
A girl walked down the stairs I was standing by and passed me. She looked completely confident. I wondered if it was her first day at St. Alexander’s too.
Move, Allison. You’re looking like an idiot, just standing here for the past ten minutes. But what should I do, just wander around and hope I find my class?
No, the smart thing to do is to go over to that group of three guys down the hall and ask them. One of them–the shortest one–had brown hair, and from what I could see, a pretty face. Another had brown hair too, but he had a little stubble and was much more energetic than the other guy. It helped that he was pretty hot too.
But my eyes were fixed on the third one. He was taller than the others, even as he leaned against the wall. He was talking right then, and seemed grumpy, but somehow still good-natured. His hair was black, and it was easy to see that he had a tall, lean body.
I wanted to go over there and talk to him. And at the same time I didn’t. He’d probably seen me standing here since forever, staring at him. I couldn’t just go over.
“Are your feet glued to the ground, or do you just not believe in walking?”
I started as the voice sounded right beside me, and whirled around, almost ready to punch someone.
“Whoa, calm down,” the guy now in front of me said. “Fighting with women is not something I’m inclined to do.”
I goggled at him for a while. He was good-looking, really good-looking. He looked to be Japanese or Korean or from somewhere around there, and his hair was perfectly black and messy in that hot way that only girls knew how to describe. His face was more on the pretty than rugged side, and even from such a close distance I couldn’t see a single flaw in his perfect skin. That little smirk he had on his lips just made him look so much better.
“I… I’m sorry,” I said.
“For what, blocking the way or staring at me?” the smirk seemed to widen.
“Both,” I said collecting myself. “You startled me.”
“I have that effect,” he answered. “You’re new around here, aren’t you? I remember seeing you at the tour.” His voice was accented, but only just.
“Yes,” I said. “I’m Allison Parker. Nice to meet you.”
“Alright then,” he said, and he rounded past me and started going down the stairs.
I frowned. “You know, when you meet someone and they introduce themselves, you’re expected to do the same.”
He turned around and raised the corners of his lips into a devilish smile. “You should know me soon enough.”
I watched him leave. Wow, he was really hot. Not just his looks, but his attitude too. Annoying, yeah, but wasn’t every hot guy?
I glanced back at the three guys standing down the hall, and saw that they were now two. The cute, pretty one had left. Now it was just the guy with stubble and him. The tall one.
Alright, that was it. I’d had enough of standing there. I do believe in walking.
I approached the guys, trying to walk with my back straight. Wait, what if they thought I was showing off my boobs? My sister Melissa thought I was always doing that. Well, is it my fault she’s twenty-four and still a surfboard?
I calmed down, and managed to get to them without turning abruptly and rushing off the other way. “Um, excuse me,” I said, “but do you know where the Management room is? I’m new and…”
“Oh, welcome to St. Alexander’s,” the brown-haired guy said brightly. “It’s my first day here too. I’m Ryan.”
His smile was so cute and sunny that I would’ve melted, if I hadn’t been staring at him. The other guy. He wasn’t what I’d call cute, or rugged, but just perfectly… handsome. Yes, handsome. There was not a trace of grumpiness in his face, but instead a charming, polite smile. And his eyes… oh, his eyes. They were beautiful– not grey, not green, but a wonderful blend, bright and arresting.
“I’m Allison,” I said. I’d managed to capture all the details of his face in a moment, and so avoided a long, awkward stare.
“I’m Leo,” the black-haired guy said. “I don’t mind taking you there.”
Yay! “Thanks,” I said with a smile.
“Watson, get to class,” Leo said sternly to Ryan, who laughed and answered, “Yes, Holmes. See you, Allison.” This last bit was directed at me with a smile, and I couldn’t help but smile back.
He walked off down the hallway, while I looked at Leo. “Holmes?” I couldn’t help but ask.
“His surname is Watson,” he answered. “He thinks it’s fun to call me Holmes.” He paused. “That’s not my name,” he added.
“Oh,” I said, as we walked towards the stairs I was hovering by just a minute ago. “Mine’s Parker.” It seemed kind of stupid, but what else could I say?
“Alright,” he said, going down the stairs. “You’re going to the first class for the freshmen, right? I just showed it to Seth. He’s a friend of mine.”
“Oh, cool,” I said. Seth. I guessed he was the cute guy who’d just been with Leo. “Is this your first year too?”
Leo laughed, an easy, calm laugh, but way too short. “This is my last year.”
I couldn’t help but feel deflated. I barely knew the guy, but still.
“Alright, here it is,” he said, stopping by a closed door. “You should get in. Your class should be starting right about now.”
“Thank you so much,” I said. “I would’ve wandered around here forever.” Actually, I would’ve just stood in the same place, staring at you, but, hey, the end result was the same.
“That’s okay,” Leo said. “If you need any help, don’t hesitate to ask.”
“Sure, thanks,” I said, and then decided I should be getting in. I opened the door slowly, and peeked in. There were about twenty people inside, sitting at tables and chatting. No sign of the teacher.
“Looks like you’re in luck,” Leo said, and I could tell that he was right next to me.
“Yeah,” I said, opening the door. “Again, thanks.”
“And again, that’s okay,” Leo said with a smile. “Welcome to St. Alexander’s, Allison.”
I beamed at him, and then he turned and left.
I closed the door behind me as I entered the room. Wow, seemed like a good first day already. I just hoped I’d find someone cool in my class too.
Leo’s friend Seth was supposed to be in this class, but I really wanted to find a girl. There were a couple of empty seats around, and I sat in one right at the end of the room, by the window. On my right was the fresh, warm breeze, and on my left, a pretty girl with straight, blonde hair.
She looked like exactly the type of girl I’d dealt with too much in high school– popular and vain, ready to bring out her claws against anyone who ticked her off, but I decided to give her a try. Besides, I couldn’t really be picky, since I knew nobody in this college. Except, well, Leo, and maybe Ryan.
“Hi,” I said to her. “I’m Allison.”
“Oh, hi,” she said, almost surprised. “I’m Scarlet.”
The name seemed to fit her. “First day?” I asked.
She gave me a little smile. “Yup. I know absolutely no-one.”
“Me neither,” I said with my own smile. “I think it’s gonna be awesome, though. Already met a cute guy.” I couldn’t help but say it.
“Seems like this college doesn’t have a shortage,” Scarlet gave me a mischievous grin. “Check out the hottie in the corner.”
I followed her little motion, and my eyes caught on a guy in the corner. His hair was brown, his eyes were black, and he leaned back in his chair with a confident and lazy posture. His own little grin was enough to match Scarlet’s.
I scanned the rest of the room, until I saw a familiar face right at the edge. “hey, look, it’s Seth,” I said automatically.
“Oh?” Scarlet turned. “Please tell me you’re talking about that cute guy in the first column.”
“Yeah,” I said. “That’s him.”
“I thought you didn’t know anybody here?” Scarlet looked at me and made a face.
“Oh, well, I don’t really know anybody,” I said. “But on the way here I met a guy named Leo. He was with his friends– one of them was Seth.”
“Ah,” Scarlet gave a knowing look. “I see.”
“What?” I asked.
“No, that’s alright,” she said. “You don’t have to say.”
Her smile was so mischievous I couldn’t help but grin back. I was about to say something when the door suddenly opened, and he walked in. The hot guy I’d met by the stairs.
“Hey, I kinda know him too,” I said to Scarlet. “Met him by the stairs. Looks like he’s in our class too.”
Scarlet was about to respond, when the guy leaned against the professor’s desk and said, “Alright then, I’m Ryouken Suzuki, and I’ll be your professor.”
Oh, his name’s Ryouken Suzuki. That sounds Japanese. So he’s Jap– wait, did he just say professor?
“Wow,” I heard Scarlet say next to me. “Hot teacher. That’s one Wattpad fantasy that was never fulfilled in high school.”
“He’s a professor?” I burst out. “What?”
“Yes, I am,” Ryouken said with a smile. Apparently I didn’t say it as quietly as I’d meant to. “New. First day here, like you.”
I just stared at him. I refused to believe it. I’d always imagined the professor to be old, with gray hair and lots of wrinkles– kind of like Albert Einstein. Not this guy.
“Alright,” Ryouken–Mr. Suzuki, I guess–was saying. “I’ll give you ten seconds each to say a couple of things about yourself. Whatever you say is basically how you’ll be presenting yourself to me in the semester. Let’s start from this end.”
To my utter relief, he started with the column near the door. Unfortunately for Seth, that meant he had to go second. After the first guy–Dustin, I think his name was–was done, Seth just barely managed to get out, “I’m Seth,” and then searched desperately for the next words.
“That’s alright, I know you,” Mr. Suzuki said in a gentleness I wouldn’t have expected from that smirk I’d first seen on him. “Next.”
Depending on what someone would say, he’d either say a couple of words or just move on. I was actually pretty impressed with the range of topics Mr. Suzuki was familiar with.
“Hi, I’m Scarlet, I like fantasy novels and I’m single.” Wait, when was did it suddenly become Scarlet’s turn?
“Oh, I like you,” Mr. Suzuki said with a grin, not missing her suggestive tone. “Favourite novel from A Song of Ice and Fire series?”
“The first, A Game of Thrones,” Scarlet answered automatically. “Really hit me hard and just hyped me up for the rest.”
“Excellent choice,” Mr. Suzuki said. “Next.”
Oh, damn, I was coming up. Quick, Allison, think of something cool to say. Something that’d make you stand out, but not stand out too much. I fished around for things to say, when all of a sudden:
“Next.”
Crap. That was me. I collected myself in an instant and said, “I’m Allison Parker, I believe in walking, I can’t tell who’s a teacher and who’s a student, and… I play tennis.” Stupid. That was stupid.
“Alright, Allison,” Mr. Suzuki said, seeming pretty amused. “Any tennis player you particularly like?”
“Um, Sam Querrey and Novak,” I answered.
“Really? I think Murray’s a better option for number one in the world.”
“You have to be joking,” I said. “Novak’s record in 2011 was spectacular.”
“Because Murray didn’t find his confidence yet,” Mr. Suzuki said. “He’s been performing consistently recently– all that changed was his attitude. He’s won the gold medal, and the US Open.”
“Yeah, his first Grand Slam,” I said. “I think it’s safe to say Djokovic has done better than that.”
“So far,” Mr. Suzuki said. “Now,” he said, and he turned to the rest of the class. “Since it’s the first day, I guess you guys can take the class off.”
He got up off the table and walked over to me– a lazy kind of movement, as he leaned down over my desk, and said in a quiet undertone, “I’ll be keeping an eye on you, Parker.”
I couldn’t see his eyes as he said it, but his voice was low and… if I had to describe it one word, rippling. He moved away from me and sat in the chair behind the professor’s desk, and I could feel the others’ eyes on me.
“What was that about?” Scarlet whispered to me.
“I have no idea,” I said slowly.
I could already tell that my time at St. Alexander’s was going to an eventful one. And I was more than excited.
 

Hayden Panettiere as Allison

Gackt as Ryouken Suzuki

Abbie Cornish as Scarlet
Colin Egglesfield as Leo

Thomas Dekker as Ryan

Beau Mirchoff as Seth


I know I'm not supposed to sway anyone, but I really had a lot of fun writing this chapter, and I'd love to write it... but I don't mind writing the other story either. And it's all up to you guys. I really don't know how I could sway you into voting for this story.


 
Hmm... how did this gorgeous guy get here?

Remember to vote by commenting!

And check out my other preview: That Super Hot Pervert is Mine 

Wednesday, 24 October 2012

How Not to Write a Book: Oh, yeah, she’s a really strong character! She’s only crying throughout the entire book!



(Whoa, it’s been a while since I’ve done one of these, eh? Don’t think anyone’s reading them, but it’s fun to write them out. I love rambling.)

Alright, time to look into the story-telling, and not just the characters. Yeah, okay, this does involve characterization too, but I’d like to convince myself I know other shit about writing apart from characters, so just humour me, okay?

This is mainly about portraying your character, rather than building. You’ve got a proper character built, with a good mixture of flaws, strong points and quirks. Now it’s time to think about how you’ll present that character to the reader.

Let’s think about a character named… Alette. (Alette was a name I’d chosen for a princess in my story, before I re-wrote the entire fucking thing. The character’s been binned, but I really quite like the name). So we’ve created Alette to be intelligent and learned, strong-willed and proud, fighting for attention with her seven older sisters (yeah. Really. Hey, don’t judge, they don’t have contraceptives in my medieval-era world). If Alette is a central character, you’ll want to show off her personality, since you’ve presumably put some effort into creating it.

One of the basic ways to describe your character is to have other characters describe her. Your lead character might be Kerra, one of Alette’s sisters. When we (the readers) first meet Alette, Kerra would describe her. Something along the lines of how it was obvious Alette had taken painstaking care in arranging her hair because some foreign king was visiting, and that she’d worn her best dress, or that she flipped a few pages of a book on the table. Small, little things like that.

What I really don’t recommend is you (or, rather, your character) describing her outright. We don’t want to be slapped by Alette’s character straight-off. We want Alette’s personality to reveal itself. We want Kerra’s initial feelings, and then her later feelings of annoyance or jealousy or sympathy to show later, when the situation calls for it.

So, now let’s assume, we have a change in viewpoint, and the character we’re currently seeing through is Alette. Another great way to know a character is to see how they view themselves. Alette might be humble, or she might know how intelligent and desired she is, and keep it only to herself. Think about how you think to yourself, and compare it to what you say to others. Very few people are the same inside and out.

Alright, now let’s come to a later scene. The King has come, but he’s more interested in business matters with Alette’s father, and though polite to Alette, he hardly regards her. She responds by making a scene in front of everyone, and then running off to her bedroom to curl up into a ball and cry.

Wait up. Make a scene in front of everyone? Curl up into a ball and cry? Is that what a proud, intelligent woman would do?

See, having Kerra repeatedly say that Alette is strong and intelligent, doesn’t make Alette strong and intelligent. Her actions do. Your actions have to back your character.

But don’t limit them. If you were to re-write the scene a little, you could easily have the desired effect, but keeping your character true. If the King were to openly avoid her, then the proud princess might try and corner him alone, ask him his reasons. If he were to reply that he simply lost track of all the princesses and forgot Alette was one, even if he were to say it kindly, she might just go and cry in her bedroom later. Secretly, of course. And it would suit her character. Because she hates being ignored, and her pride couldn’t take it.

Of course, Alette might not be as strong or as intelligent as Kerra believes, but it’s your job as the writer to make the reader believe what Kerra believes. We’re seeing through the character’s eyes, and we have to see the image of Alette as Kerra sees it, even if it might not be correct.


So, then, that’s it for now. More Mao pictures, coming next ;)

Sunday, 29 July 2012

How Not to Write a Book: “I have four really amazing guys who all like me, but I’m not that special.”


Not an expert talking. Just a rambler.

Ah, the bane of every writer. Mary-Sues. Or, in my case, the male counterpart, Gary-Stus. So, if you don’t know what a Mary-Sue is, let’s copy-paste a description off TVTropes.com: “She's exceptionally talented in an implausibly wide variety of areas, and may possess skills that are rare or nonexistent in the canon setting. She also lacks any realistic, or at least story-relevant, character flaws — either that or her "flaws" are obviously meant to be endearing… In other words, the term "Mary Sue" is generally slapped on a character who is important in the story, possesses unusual physical traits, and has an irrelevantly over-skilled or over-idealized nature.”
(I almost lost myself in there. That site is addictive.)

So she’s the vision of perfection. You’d probably think these characters would be easy to spot. They’re not. They’re easy to spot if you’re an objective reader, but it’s damn hard to realize it of your own character.

I actually didn’t realize I had Mary-Sues and Gary-Stus (oh, the fuck, I’ll just keep calling them Sues, applicable to both male and female) until I took the Mary-Sue litmus test. I recommend it. Or, you can just read through my post. I recommend that more.

Let’s take Character A. Character A’s not that great, I mean, he has flaws– he’s cold and cruel, he can’t love anyone, and he has no problem manipulating and controlling people. Now, just try and look closely– do you really think those are flaws? How many can you look at and actually frown? Do you not secretly believe those are all really cool attributes?

You might want to try writing down each specific trait of your characters. Don’t bother separating the traits into good or bad, just write them down. Sues will usually have an unbelievably long line of good qualities, usually about how gorgeous or smart the character is.

Sues are usually characters we’d secretly like to be. For female authors, this usually means their Sue is strong and independent, sexy and alluring to men. Female authors are usually the culprits of Gary-Stus (like… me). These are male characters we’d love to date. They’re very good-looking (obviously!), intelligent and strong, with an inner romantic side. Male authors also create Mary-Sues quite frequently, though I’ve hardly come across Gary-Stus created by men. Unless they’ve been created specifically to appeal to female audiences.

Ah, fuck it. Just go to the Mary-Sue Litmus Test, because I couldn’t even recognize my own Sues without it.

Identified your Sue? Okay. Now it’s time to fix your Sue. And believe me, all Sues need to be fixed. Well, unless they’re background characters, and don’t have much screen-time. If not, time to fix.

One of the Sues I’d discovered was Rinna, younger sister to Ruki, who I mentioned last How Not to Write a Book post. She got the most points in the test, even more than Ruki (who I suspected might be a Gary Stu right from the beginning, but refused to admit it). Mainly because she falls in category A of Sues– she’s the one I’d love to be. She’s the most beautiful woman, with long, shiny black hair and purple eyes. She’s pretty enough to be considered flawless by Shay, who’s unbelievably picky and has really sharp eyes. She’s intelligent, and rich, and she’s good with swords and herbs, as she and her brother are deadly assassins– the best in the land. She’s sickeningly good, but as most of the Mary-Sues I’d encountered before were usually the strong, tomboyish type, I really didn’t think Rinna was one.

You can just decide right then which qualities you’d like to change or dump. After failing the Litmus Test miserably, I decided right then to scrap Rinna’s skill with sword. I then looked at her ‘flaws’– the nice traits about her that I’d tried to hide as flaws. Okay, so she’s supposed to be really close to her brother, and be close to no-one else. How about making her really dependent on her brother? Not just jealous for her brother’s affection or anything like that, but really dependent? Unable to properly function without his orders.

If you’re writing a Sue that you’d like to be, you should consider writing in your own flaws. You should be able to name at least three right off the bat. Prideful, lazy, bitchy… those would be my three big ones. If you can’t name even one without thinking hard about it, then doom on you. Doom on you! 



I can’t write more on this subject just yet, since I’m still struggling with it myself. If you have any tips, then please leave a comment. Thank you!

Monday, 23 July 2012

How Not to Write a Book: Let’s use a cookie cutter and make some characters!


Okay, disclaimer repeat: I am not an expert, I’m just someone who’s made these mistakes before and am putting down how I got around them.

Alright, so the last post was about reducing or boiling down your large cast, and the one point that I (and everyone) kept making was to develop your characters. And that’s exactly what this post is about.

So, the first step: actually creating the character. All characters must be created with a specific purpose. Like the last post said, you probably shouldn’t add a character simply because you like their personality. They should add something to the story.

(If you could see my face right now, you’d see me in quite a bit of pain. I hate sharing information about my story. I’m secretive like that. But I really want to get my point across. And because I’m also quite weird, I’ll be using nicknames only.) So, for me, all characters start out as one basic trait. My lead character, Az, started with the basic idea of making him intelligent. Shay was made to be energetic (and good-looking… this is actually an integral part of his personality) and Aiku (I love this nickname!) just frankly mean. Once you’ve got the base down, it’s time to start building.

Character development has always come quite naturally for me. In fact, I’m always surprised when people say that creating characters is the hardest thing for them. I’ve always found it extremely easy, though this may be because I have quite a bit of free time, and my mind is always circling around my story. I have never used character sheets– never needed them.

The best way to develop a character is to try and come up with as many scenes as possible about them. You can write them out, but if you’re lazy like me, just thinking them up should be enough. These scenes don’t have to be those influential to the story– in fact, I think the mundane ones work the best. In the fantasy novel I’m writing, the scenes that helped with the character development included campfire-talk scenes, humourous scenes that had no place in the story, and… um… pillow talk. That only worked for two characters though (since I typically suck at romance) but it worked well.

Out-of-world scenes are very useful too. My favourite one is the waiting-in-bank scene. My favourite response was from Shay, who is a soldier. He’d just ask someone behind to hold his place, and then go and sleep on the sofas that you sit and fill stuff out on. One of his qualities is over-familiarity with everything.

Other scenes to use would be:
1.      A trip to an extremely crowded shopping mall.
2.      If someone were to fall sick.
3.      An interview for a job
4.      A trip to a bar. The actions of the characters both sober and drunk.

And loads more. It’s up to you, really.

After the developing the characters, try comparing them with the base; look at how many qualities they gained and how they relate to your original idea base. Az is intelligent, but he’s also embarrassed easily, generally perceptive but awkward when it comes to women, and with leadership qualities he never recognized before. Shay is energetic and fun, but superficial and flaky in relationships, vain and with handicapping fear of blood. Aiku is mean and short-tempered, but very proud with a noble air, and is very romantic too.

I don’t know if it’s happened to other writers, but I’ve found that in the process of developing characters, the bases can change. The original King written for the story was mature and rational; the current and final one is shy and has unbelievably low self-esteem. Ruki was originally noble, proud and short-tempered– he was written as Aiku’s rival, and they clashed as they had very similar personalities. He is now sneaky, clever and with a loose sense of morality– and he and Aiku now clash because they’re too different.

The King’s personality changed around the story, while Ruki’s personality changed the story. This has happened a few times in the past, in previous stories for me, and I’m yet unsure as to whether or not it’s a bad thing. I think it is.

Well, I hope this post helped someone. If not, I’m glad to just have rambled anyway. Next post: Writing Mary-Sues and how to get out of it.

Saturday, 21 July 2012

How Not to Write a Book: Doc, Grumpy, Sleepy, Happy, Sneezy, Bashful and Dopey


My first post in my series of How Not to Write a Book, where I’ll give out tips to amateur writers. Now, I’m hardly an experienced writer, but I’ve made these mistakes before and I thought I should share how to avoid or rectify them.

Today’s post: Characterisation, specifically dealing with long lists of characters. There’ll be more than one post on characterisation, since this is, I think, my strong suit.

Right, so more than a few writers have a large cast of characters. There’s nothing wrong with that. The problem is how you develop the characters, and how they fit in with the ‘bigger picture’. A lot of the time, you can find yourself with a huge arsenal of characters, all playing a part in the story, and you’re loathe to let them go. Sometimes you can pull it off. Most of the time, you end up with the Seven Dwarfs.

The Seven Dwarfs is basically when you’ve got a load of characters that have one trait only. It happens when you’re afraid of adding conflicting traits to characters, and decide that instead of ‘messing up’ that character, you can create a new one. For example, you’d like to create a male character who is romantic, for some important purpose in the story (give me time… I’ll think of one). You’d also like a male character who is short-tempered and snarky. And another character is created.

I had this problem plenty of times in the past. I was afraid of making my characters copies of each other, and so I worked to give them all different qualities. Two characters couldn’t be fiery. The heroine was a simple girl who liked sewing, and of course she couldn’t be fiery either.

I got over that problem. I think the main thing that helped was to just look at life. This might be the plainest, most overused piece of advice ever, but it’s true. My sister’s short-tempered, bitchy and superficial, but she’s also selfless, giving and fun. If a person can have clashing qualities, why can’t a character? If you can work on creating deeper characters, you’ll find that you might not need so many.

I axed a character from my novel, and pushed another one further into the background. I didn’t like doing it, since I loved both those girls, but it was necessary. I’m also in the process of picking out unnecessary gods. They’re a set of seven, but I know now that they don’t all need to be equally main.

And now another problem: condensing characters. I don’t mean that literally– don’t just take two characters and mush them together, to try and get all of their qualities in one. You don’t really need to. If you develop a single character far enough, they’ll eventually cover another one’s job. (I’m trying to articulate this as clearly as I can. I think I’m failing).

I wanted this post to be a bit longer, but I can’t seem to increase it right now XD. Like I said before, I can’t quite get what I’m trying to say across. I am a failure of a writer.
The next post is going to be about actually developing your characters, to get them to fulfil their roles and more, and that post is going to be longer and more detailed. So please check back again.  :)